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Post by lordhowl on May 22, 2010 23:01:03 GMT -5
let me clarify my question i ment to ask, is there an actual organization dedicated to hunting werewolfs? You can't really call it an organization. It's more like two retired professors who saw something odd in their different specialties relating to some news items and hired a detective to check it out. They later convinced several friends. The detective, Lewis, nearly got himself killed in the first case, but then became obsessed with werewolf cases. This "organization" is only about as organized as a playground basketball team. It's only structure is: the guy who pays the detective is in control. It "formed," that is, hired Lewis, about six months before the Bailey Downs incident. It doesn't even have a name. Yes, they would just kill werewolves at first. If you were bit, all Lewis could do is wait until you change and kill you. Until Lewis found Sam's notebook and then they realized that this was like a virus, and there could be a treatment like monkshood. But then they got imaginative, looked back at the legends, and found something much better. Lewis' own philosophy is, however, if the werewolf is in full animal form, kill it. Because if it's there, you are fighting for your life. Daphne was the first fully animalized werewolf he tried "the cure" on, and that was only because he had her dropped and helpless.
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Post by lordhowl on May 22, 2010 23:05:15 GMT -5
oi i havent had time to read past chapter 6.... but i like the story this far, a somewhat wide use of "fuck" and "bitch" but thats just my opinion xD and does there a actual organization (in the novel) that hunts for werewolfs??? and if so what do they do with werewolfs when they find them? a cure maye or just bang bang dead? For the words "fuck" and "bitch," first, I thought i had to keep with the character of Ginger for the first one. I mean, listen to how much Ginger says "fuck" GS1. It's really about every minute. Actually, later in my story, she doesn't swear as much, simply because, she's no longer "in charge" and no longer tries to show dominance to Brigitte. If Brigitte and June's language is bad here, it's because they are under so much stress and terror, and for June, it's also one component of her going manic. Not only that, but Brigitte was, after all, Ginger's sister and was exposed to her lexicon every day. Lewis rarely swears, and the few times he does, it's because he's been pushed too far and isn't handling it anymore. Answer to the "hunt" question is above, or below, depending.
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Post by Grim The Weird on May 27, 2010 23:24:09 GMT -5
hey yeah i just dint realize how ofthen they say it in the movies so i got a chance to read some more. Chapter 6 was interesting. Dialogue in the chapter leads me to believe that this story might have a happy ending. Thou I’m not sure since you said that the story only gets more brutal >.< so I will just have to wait and see. And I am intrigued to see that Brigitte’s location has already been found. Cant wait to see what happens. Chapter 7 Glad to see that Brigitte is getting along better with ginger now (exepft for that she tried to kill her again ) And it was also cool to see Brigitte punching violets arm so hard that it broke her bones, wich means she cares for June. (I enjoyed that) besides it really sets it up for a almost sister relationship between Brigitte and June like ginger and Brigitte had. Oh and I found a mistake in one section. Just a letter wich will be easy to fix xD I added the full section so that it is easier for you to find. June was surprised at the interest Brigitte showed. "Yes, they have a boys wing here. They keep us separate, mostly. Twice a week we have dinner with them, and they we have some activity therapy with them, too . . . oh shit, speaking of boys." ^^^ thats the part that needs fixing.
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Post by Grim The Weird on May 27, 2010 23:42:13 GMT -5
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Post by Grim The Weird on May 27, 2010 23:46:17 GMT -5
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Post by lordhowl on May 28, 2010 10:20:39 GMT -5
hey yeah i just dint realize how ofthen they say it in the movies The language isn't like that in Unleashed nor in Back to the Beginning, but in, GS Ginger and Sam are . . . very salty. Especially Ginger. so i got a chance to read some more. Chapter 6 was interesting. Dialogue in the chapter leads me to believe that this story might have a happy ending. Thou I’m not sure since you said that the story only gets more brutal >.< so I will just have to wait and see. I have an oath of silence about the mood in which it actually ends, but the chapters I've been writing are very brutal. Chapter 8 is actually somewhat humorous. Chapters 9-11 begin to get brutal, and Chapters 12-13 become more so. And I am intrigued to see that Brigitte’s location has already been found. Cant wait to see what happens. Yeah, it seems simple, doesn't it? Chapter 7 Glad to see that Brigitte is getting along better with ginger now (exepft for that she tried to kill her again ) And it was also cool to see Brigitte punching violets arm so hard that it broke her bones, wich means she cares for June. (I enjoyed that) besides it really sets it up for a almost sister relationship between Brigitte and June like ginger and Brigitte had. A sequel should expand on the original. You can't have it be just about the original characters. I'm not saying that just to be selfish about introducing my characters. No, the reason why I introduced more characters is a sequel has to expand the original fictitious world and give it more characters. Otherwise, it just becomes uninteresting. So, the single event of Ginger being bitten in Bailey Downs continues to have further and further consequences for more and more people. Moreover, her being bitten took place due to other events that had been taking place in the wider world. I'm learning a lot about story-telling with this, and I like to show it off. ;D Oh and I found a mistake in one section. Just a letter wich will be easy to fix xD I added the full section so that it is easier for you to find. [snip: corrected ty!] I'm glad when a single mistake stands out so much; it tells me that I'm doing a pretty good job proofreading it. I want to thank you for reading the story, and I hope you're ready for the next chapters, which are more brutal, violent, sexually suggestive and disturbing.
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Post by lordhowl on May 28, 2010 17:33:07 GMT -5
lol. This first one actually makes me want to watch Unleashed again. Emily Perkins does do such a great job as Brigitte, and in those scenes, the make-up did work.
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Post by Grim The Weird on May 28, 2010 17:47:06 GMT -5
ha i understand adding more characters to the story, its only natural to involve more characters for a great story. its not selfish at all. nice to know you wont give away the end. though the end really consurns me. not that i dont like the story so far, but its just that i personaly wouldnt know how to end it and keep the fans from bitching about it (excuse my words : P). idk if you follow the supernatural series or just watched that one episode where emily was in, but if you saww the end of season 5, chuck (the prophet) tells it how it is. you cant ever please the fans in the end. the ending really did suck, but good think for fans that that was a decoy ending for some reason... so another happy season follos. another good example is the "Lost" series. i personaly dont watch it, but i herd on the news about the ending and how fans reacted to it being verry confusing, where it turned out that the characters where dead after all. sry for the spoiler if you havent seen it. any ways, i wont nagg you about it but plz take your time to write the ending, we can wait a bit longer for a kick ass final chapter. haha yeah it shows how good your writing skills are xD only saw one letter that needed corrected but i wounder, how come no one else had told you about it before? i can't be the only one reading this novel right?
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Post by lordhowl on May 28, 2010 18:38:44 GMT -5
ha i understand adding more characters to the story, its only natural to involve more characters for a great story. its not selfish at all. nice to know you wont give away the end. though the end really consurns me. not that i dont like the story so far, but its just that i personaly wouldnt know how to end it and keep the fans from bitching about it (excuse my words : P). idk if you follow the supernatural series or just watched that one episode where emily was in, but if you saww the end of season 5, chuck (the prophet) tells it how it is. you cant ever please the fans in the end. Just like writing the story itself, I'll end it the way I do for my own reasons. I already know what the ending is, I've had the longest time to think of it, and I have a thick skin if fans don't like it. And, of course, that only applies if I have any fans to speak of. [snip: nothing to say] any ways, i wont nagg you about it but plz take your time to write the ending, we can wait a bit longer for a kick ass final chapter. Yes, I know how it will end, though as always, not in every detail. You don't know that until you write it. haha yeah it shows how good your writing skills are xD only saw one letter that needed corrected but i wounder, how come no one else had told you about it before? i can't be the only one reading this novel right? No, they won't. If you look, the story does have critiques, but they don't tell you the necessary things to make you a better writer. No, for that, I have to go to a writers' meetup group. No, you're not the only one reading this story. In fact, the stats show it has been getting readers from the US, Canada, France, Latvia, Denmark, Australia, Britain and Germany this month. They don't write me or anything, but they've been reading it.
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Post by Grim The Weird on May 29, 2010 15:25:34 GMT -5
read 2 more chapters today before i have to go >.<
all i can say about chapter 9 is, what a dream. i think i dint see the transition from being awake to dreaming and for a moment there thought that you had resurected sam and that later in the story he would re apear and help briggit. then they got to b's parents room. at that point i still thought she was telligng ginger what had hapened after ginger died, i have to say i was shocked with b's behaviour before realizing it was a dream.
just a few more chapters to go xD
i wounder what genre you will choose to write other novels? are you going to stay in horror??
i do have to read your original stories after you create more.
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Post by lordhowl on May 29, 2010 18:10:37 GMT -5
Thank you so much, I sent you a PM about this.
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Post by lordhowl on May 29, 2010 19:05:08 GMT -5
Umm, one thing. Chapter 11 is as long as three of the other chapters. Just so you know. I'd like to divide it up, but I don't want to confuse readers even more.
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missfirefly
Just Bit
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Post by missfirefly on Jul 8, 2010 15:28:34 GMT -5
I liked Sam and Brigitte together, they were quite cute. ;D It's very tragic that Ginger killed Sam. Had he lived, GS2 would have been a lot different (in a postive way).
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Post by Grim The Weird on Jul 8, 2010 15:44:16 GMT -5
i think we can all agree with you xD
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Post by sophielovessam on Jul 11, 2010 15:20:44 GMT -5
hi, new to the site and love it! ok, when Sam said he didnt think of her that way I think he actually does have feelings for her becasue it kind of shows that he thinks of her in a way more than what ginger was implying Was just reading this tread, and came across my very first post as a member to this site! Lol! Think I posted somewhere as a guest though..
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Post by epiklow on Jul 13, 2010 9:40:53 GMT -5
Hahah awe!
Isn't it crazy though, that after 10 years people are still talking about the film. I think that just shows how great this movie is... and how much time flys!!!
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Post by lordhowl on Jul 13, 2010 11:45:32 GMT -5
Hahah awe! Isn't it crazy though, that after 10 years people are still talking about the film. I think that just shows how great this movie is... and how much time flys!!! It's timeless, really. They could have made it in the '70s and not anything would have been changed, and it would look and sound much the same. It's made better by the fact that it really has no technology. No cellphones, no laptops. No real references to music in it either, you don't know what the sisters listen to.
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Post by Grim The Weird on Jul 13, 2010 16:22:38 GMT -5
agreed 100% =3
maybe they listen to kinda gothink music or close to that genre? based on their apearence. perhaps some evanecese, disturbed, korn, slipknot... who knows really:P
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Post by sophielovessam on Jul 21, 2010 9:04:38 GMT -5
Well I read the old script somewhere on this site, apperantly the first scene is them dancing to Nirvana in their bedroom with a picture of Kurt Cobain and Courtney Love on their wall... I think.
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Post by †Wicky Wicked† on Jul 21, 2010 9:59:23 GMT -5
Wow ... I can't imagine that. Them dancing to music, especially Brigitte. Seems so unnatural for her.
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